Tears from Kabul Book 1
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3.0 • 32 Ratings
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Publisher Description
The women will have three days to stop pursuing an education and return back to their homes, Thursday morning at 09:00 is the deadline set by the Taliban. If the women do not return to their homes by then, Dawar will be executed. Dawar is Niki's little brother who is only eight years old. Niki is the leader for the women who are trying to receive an education.
Tensions are high and the clock is ticking, time is running out for Dawar, Will SSGT Jones be able to save Dawar and the women from the Taliban?
Word count: 16,113. Contains violence and adult language.
Customer Reviews
Tears from Kabul
Great story! Unfortunately the English was very bad. Someone needs to proof read books before printing.
Tears from Kabul
Not well written
NoComment of Nunawading
Sorry Michael, this is the most frustrating, poorly written, grammatically reprehensible, repetitive books I've EVER read. I did stay the distance though, with slim hopes that it would improve! It didn't!
Just a couple of tips, if I may... someone who stands against a government is a traitor, not a "trader"!
When using inverted commas, which thankfully you didn't do too much, they are specifically for speech in the first person, not for continued in narrative in the third person (i.e. he, she, they). In addition, when used they were often unnecessary, or incorrectly placed, often mid-sentence, with either no starting, or alternately, no closing inverted comma.
I was interested in the premise of your novel, but please, next time (if there is a next time) please employ some proof-readers at a minimum, and a decent editor? I do think the story was worth telling, but will not be purchasing any subsequent novels in this series, not at any price!
Sorry, I've never, ever written a bad review before, but honestly, someone has to give you some advice on how to engage readers, because at the moment that is absolutely not happening. Hopefully, as an avid reader, you may take on board some of my criticism, as I'm honestly only trying to help. On that note, sadly I have to admit that I gave your book a one star rating - and though I didn't feel it merited any, my review could not be submitted without at least one!
Good-luck in the future.