The Quiet Within
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4.3 • 12 Ratings
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Publisher Description
Life as Eoin knows it changes in the course of one day.
With his village under attack Eoin's mentor, the mage,Jaeger, sends him on a quest to right a wrong done long ago. Eoin doesn't have the same faith in his own abilities as Jaeger does and is more than grateful when his old friend, guardian Kailean, joins him.
Together they must evade the enemy who is following them and complete the quest in order to save the village and people they love. As time goes by though, it is harder and harder to know who to trust. With only each other for company, Eoin and Kai are forced to face feelings they'd been denying for years. If they can't complete the search they've undertaken, then everything they've found could be lost forever.
A journey of trust, where hope and love shine light on a landscape of darkness. But is the light strong enough to avoid being distinguished by the dark forever?
Customer Reviews
Good story, beautiful cover art, but..... 🤷🏻♀️😔
The story line for this book is a really good one, a young man, Eoin, in training to become a healer and mage, learns of a tragic episode that had happened to his mentor and father figure, Jaeger, many years before. Placing his trust in this man, Eoin agrees to leave the village, to travel far and attempt to right the wrong that had occurred so many years before.
There’s a naïveté in the writing style, it actually feels as though it’s been written for children around the nine to 10 year mark. Although of course, no nine or 10 year old child should be reading this book. There are some grammatical errors, some missing words and some of those pesky commas have gone MIA, giving cause to some confusion.
The dialogue between Eoin and Kai is a little stilted and remains so right to the end of the book. It feels as though we’re not able to see the soul of the characters, to really know them. The lack of contractions goes a long way in making the dialogue formal instead of casual and with an ease that would be right between two young men who had known each other since childhood.
The writing is clunky and often jumps from one scene to another, with no explanation or dialogue between the two MC’s to explain their journey from one place to the next. There is also an awful lot of narrative.
Again, great story line, the writing just leaving this reader wanting more. And it’s for the story line that I’m giving this review three stars instead of two.
3 stars