Murder in Lamut

There are some big holes here:

The authors seem to have left out transitions between or introductions to scenes in many places. I kept feeling like I was reading along, and suddenly characters were in another place, engaged in different activities, than in the previous paragraph, with no wind up, nor introduction to the next chapter or story element. Like “poof suddenly the character is in conversation with a new person, days later and miles away!” Places where scenes and openings were partially written and forgotten about, like where one mercenary arrives in town and is told to see the Sword Master immediately - yet he goes off to the tavern, drinks and then goes off, not to the Swordmaster. The sword master sends people to find the mercenaries the next day, as if the first scene had never occurred. Again, a failure of editing, I’m sorry to say. Many of these issues should have been caught even after the first reading. Overall an ok story, but there’s a lot of words to lead up to a pretty dull climax, in my opinion. Instead of a big “ta dah!” Sherlock Holmes moment, it’s like “Uhh” , from the mercenary who is supposed to be the super smart one. There are also too many run on sentences. (Once again, more basic editing is needed in all of these books!)