Not Just Any Omega

Just my opinion…

It’s not a bad story, but I have several areas of dislike in it.
I’ll try to keep the spoilers to a minimum, but there might still be some, depending on how sensitive you are to those?

My biggest problem with it (I think) is that it’s too short. I am struggling to see, why this many events were put into such few days (and pages). Here’s why:

Character development, and emotional connections would have been more believable, had they actually had time to get to know one another. As a reader, I never really found out how I felt about anyone, because I only ever got to know the bare minimum about them. I wouldn’t have been shocked if any of them had suddenly turned out to work for the other side … they all just felt like the people you meet in a supermarket. They fill the space, maaaaybe you exchange a smile or annoyed eyeroll, but you don’t remember them or develop any like/dislike towards them… You just don’t know enough about them to develop any attachments. And it’s a mystery to me, why that is different for the main character in this story. She meets a ton of new people, and despite knowing them for no more than a few days, she decides they are the good guys and they are suddenly her best friends (I get that the “mate” thing is different, but why trust his pack, or the wizards?)… Rather than just saying some people are the good guys, so they love the main character and want what’s best for her, and others are the baddies, so they are going to be bullies or violent menaces, they could actually have found out that they are (or aren’t) trustworthy, and likeable people, had they had any meaningful conversations, or activities outside of major crises…
more pages and spreading out the story over maybe a couple of weeks or months might have helped this.

This also would have improved the pace of the story for me. The events would have made more sense, had they not so neatly lined up one after the other over a span if just a couple of days - when did anyone have time to prepare for any of this? Do the baddies just always have someone at hand, whom they can sell a… lets call it a personal slave?… to, at any given time? Is everyone just always prepared to march to war? Or rather, are they pretty much sitting on the doorstep of their enemies, (because it doesn’t even take time to get there)? To me, more time would be needed.

It is of course possible, that the passing of time just didn’t register with me. Maybe it was mentioned, but I overlooked it? I wouldn’t know. But this was my experience of the story.

Also, I am one of those weirdos who gets irritated by spelling errors, and wrong autocorrect… and there are a few to many of those for my liking…

However - if the author were to rewrite the story and flesh it out in the areas that were skimped over, I think it has potential to be pretty neat :)