I'm the new KING of London, but it's her body I crave to conquer.
Her enemies have become my own. Her body is my favorite toy.
We were never supposed to meet, but then there she was across the bar sitting beside my cousin's newest obsession. A small little beauty with a grin on her sweet lips and a low-cut top meant to tease—to destroy a man's self-control. She didn't see me, but I took in every sensual inch while placing a target on her head.
Our paths will cross, and she'll fight, but I'm a man of my convictions. My vow is unbreakable.
I'll be back for you, my Venus.
The author’s stories have promise, but often lack clear segues. Repetitive phrasing is also an amateur mistake.
Additionally, grammar errors interfere with the flow of the story. The editor and author need to review objective and nominative pronouns (I, me…), the difference between lie, and lay, the use of who, and whom.
Using words to appear sophisticated when they don’t fit the content (for instance-imbibe perks) completely misses the mark.