Warriors ScorchFang's Omen
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2.6 • 25 Ratings
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Publisher Description
Scorchkit wants to be Deputy some day, but somehow his Destiny had charged from being a warrior. Starclan changed, his Destiny so he has two choices. He can become a Warrior or become Medicine cat. If he chosoes Medicine cat he can't have a mate, if he chooses Warrior, Starclan will never visit him again. Later on, he actually chooses medicine cat at his Apprentice naming...What happens next...Find out.
Created by: Jordan Claire Drouin a Sir John Franklin High School Student.
Customer Reviews
Better,but still needs work
I am a bookworm, so I know what the writer needs to improve on:
First of all,not swapping tense-
The author needs to stay in either past tense or present tense throughout the whole book,rather than swapping between them. This is an improvement from ‘Mosskit’s promise’ but still needs work.
Grammar and punctuation-
Again, better than ‘Mosskit’s promise’ but needs polishing. Sometimes they forget to put full stops, and that makes it very confusing for the reader.
Wrong words in the wrong places-
The writer puts ‘is’ instead of ‘were’ or ‘are’ such as
‘Whoever and whoever is sharing prey’. It’s pretty weird.
I wish the author luck on their next book.
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Um… what did I just witness? Hi uh I’ve read your other… i dont think I should say book…. booklet? Anyway… it was called mosskit’s promise. I reviewed it and… well, it was not great. Same thing with this. I thought you’d get better but im loosing hope. :( I wish you luck, because you thoroughly need it… so good luck<3 (btw same thing with cover art! SO unprofessional! Use something over then pencils, and take an art class!) <3
Hi
Hi please dont read the hate comments because you probs just started writing focus on the positive comments not the negative ones.
Good luck for future books
~dingo~on~pawz~