Warriors ScorchFang's Omen
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2.6 • 24 Ratings
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Publisher Description
Scorchkit wants to be Deputy some day, but somehow his Destiny had charged from being a warrior. Starclan changed, his Destiny so he has two choices. He can become a Warrior or become Medicine cat. If he chosoes Medicine cat he can't have a mate, if he chooses Warrior, Starclan will never visit him again. Later on, he actually chooses medicine cat at his Apprentice naming...What happens next...Find out.
Created by: Jordan Claire Drouin a Sir John Franklin High School Student.
Customer Reviews
Better,but still needs work
I am a bookworm, so I know what the writer needs to improve on:
First of all,not swapping tense-
The author needs to stay in either past tense or present tense throughout the whole book,rather than swapping between them. This is an improvement from ‘Mosskit’s promise’ but still needs work.
Grammar and punctuation-
Again, better than ‘Mosskit’s promise’ but needs polishing. Sometimes they forget to put full stops, and that makes it very confusing for the reader.
Wrong words in the wrong places-
The writer puts ‘is’ instead of ‘were’ or ‘are’ such as
‘Whoever and whoever is sharing prey’. It’s pretty weird.
I wish the author luck on their next book.
Hi
Hi please dont read the hate comments because you probs just started writing focus on the positive comments not the negative ones.
Good luck for future books
~dingo~on~pawz~
Try a bit harder next time
First of all, I’m glad the author is getting into writing, but please edit before publishing. The book jumps from present to past tense and it’s really confusing. I recommend redoing drafts over and over again before publishing to avoid hate comments/reviews.