Seduced (The Billionaire's Command #1)
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3.9 • 204 Ratings
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Publisher Description
When Caroline's company won an all expenses paid trip to Hawaii, she thought all she'd be doing was lying on the beach drinking mai tais with her best friend Lisa. Little did she know her life would be turned upside down when she ran into Mark Selzer in the elevator.
Expecting their one night of passion to be only that, Caroline is shocked when Mark shows up at her door two weeks later. Will she be able to open up enough to let him into her life? And how will she react when she finds out he's the heir to the largest resort company in the country?
This 15,000 word story is the first instalment in The Billionaire's Command trilogy. Here's an excerpt:
On the fourth day, Lisa and I were going to leave the resort and go find somewhere nice to eat along the main strip. We were just leaving the hotel when I realized I’d left my sunglasses in my room.
“Crap. Can you wait for me in the lobby? It’s so bright out I don’t think I’ll be able to see anything if I don’t take my sunglasses.”
“Yeah, sure,” Lisa replied, and I made my way back to the elevator. I was racking my brain trying to remember where I had put the sunglasses, so much so that I didn’t notice the man coming out of the elevators when the doors opened, and I barrelled straight into him.
“Oh my God, I’m so sorry!” I exclaimed, embarrassed.
“No, no, it was my fault. I apologize,” the man replied, grabbing my shoulders gently to steady me. His touch was strong, confident, and it sent a surge of electricity running through me. I looked up at the man, and my breath caught in my throat.
Looking down at me was the most gorgeous man I’d ever seen in my life. High cheekbones, a day’s worth of dark brown stubble, hair that seemed to practically flow from his head in a polo shirt and jeans that looked formal somehow, here in Hawaii. I grabbed his arm to steady myself, the hard muscles of his biceps bulging against my skin.
For the first time in my life, I found myself completely speechless. I wanted to say something, anything, but no words were coming out of my mouth. I was completely captivated, taken in by the man’s glistening blue eyes, like the deep waters here on the Hawaiian coast.
“Are you alright?” he asked me, his voice kind, but deep.
“Yes. Yes, I’m fine. Thank you,” I stammered, feeling like an idiot. The man smiled at me and I melted into a pool on the elevator floor.
“Perfect. Sorry about that once more,” he told me, leaving the elevator. I watched as the man walked away and the doors closed behind me. As the elevator slid smoothly up to the 12th floor I had completely forgotten what I even came up here for. I couldn’t think about anything except that guy.
Customer Reviews
hmmm.
well it’s interesting enough, but it’s one of those books I would call a teaser. They reel you just long enough to give you a taste so that you’ll hopefully buy the rest. just saying, if anyone was wondering.
Great, Humorous, and Real
I absolutely loved it. The characters were true to life, and the story neither dragged it’s feet, nor ran away with itself. I’m definitely ready for #2.
By the numbers
This 'book' is part of the recent practice of 'giving' you a book which is really just the first few chapters of one, trying to get you addicted. Then you have to pay for the rest, not even knowing how many there will be.
So, instead of paying $3 for a book, you'll end up paying $30, as the parts are sold piecemeal. The books are never worth that much, and this one certainly isn't, but they think you'll be desperate enough to want to know what happens, that you won't mind being robbed -- frequently, in small amounts.
This one isn't likely to do that -- I do mind. The writing is amateurish, and there's little dialogue, just the 'romance' novel staple of two people being instantly, inexplicably, madly oversexed in each other's presence.
And there's a danger with the practice of 'pushing' your product: if you're paid for quantity, you'll pad to get as much quantity as possible. The likelihood of enticing readers drops when much of your sample is filler -- milking it for more than it's worth so you can find a good cliffhanger stopping point.
Yes, the ending should make me want more, but since the filler failed to make me care about the characters (a better use of my time and your space), the suspense never happened.
Note to other Publishing Pushers: make sure your first installment is addictive. No good trying to get someone hooked on talcum powder.